Draft #2 Observation

How are you beginning this paper? 

You, again, read each other's drafts.

Homework:

1.  Read comments and make revisions.  The Final Version is due next Tuesday. What will you do to improve it?  You earn points for making changes.

2.  TWFTD:  thing

Sentence Variety

Note:  objective vs. subjective?  See homework on 10/11.


1. The temperature was dropping so I picked all my peppers last night.

2. If it froze last night my tomatoes are probably finished.

3. I wanted bushels of tomatoes when I planted four different varieties.


We look at sentences and Section 24 in Everyday Writer. I explain subordination and coordination.

You could watch these two explain it all....

And then you can listen to this.

Homework:

1.  Draft #2 due, typed. Look at your sentences.  Is there variety in length and structure?  Run spell check.  Be sure all your details help to make your point.  You should be certain what your point is!


2.  TWFTD: sinister  (be sure to read all the way down to the II section).

Draft #1 Observation

Today you read and comment on each other's drafts to practice for revising your own draft.

Revision = to re-see.

Analyze:  Are the details clear?  Do I understand and "see" the scene?

Synthesize:  Does it all add up to make the point?

Evaluate:  What works well?  What needs to be improved?

Copy the above in your daybook.  Then you will fill out the blue "Writer's Sheet" (handout).  I'll pass around 2 "Reader's Sheets" that will be filled out about your draft.  When we're done, all these sheets will go home with you, and you will revise your draft into Draft #2.

Homework:


1.  Make changes/additions to your draft.  Draft #2 typed is due Thursday. How will you save it?  NO FLASH DRIVES!


2.  TWFTD:  tough