Draft #1 Due for Kickstarter on Paper

Today is about giving feedback. YOU are the audience, so you need to communicate to each other what YOU find effective. Politely. Also, remember to focus on the CAMPAIGN, not the idea. How can the presentation be MORE persuasive?

Note: the purple comment sheets earn YOU points. Be detailed and thoughtful.

ALSO, you may write ON the draft you read with your REACTIONS. This is a rough draft, so DO NOT PROOFREAD or edit -- just provide reactions/ input/ ideas.

Useful comments on a draft:    

What colors? How much? When will I get it? Why...? What does x mean? More info needed here...How does x work? I want THIS reward! Don't you need money for x?

As  you wait for a draft, or when you finish commenting on TWO drafts, (or if you did not bring a draft), please do Ex. 23.9 on page 272 in The Everyday Writer. Put a number in each blank, and write the correct word next to that number IN YOUR DAYBOOK. (There are 13 blanks.) Use the "Glossary of Usage" starting on page 274 if you need help on the tough ones.
 

Homework:

1. Use today's feedback and get your paper ready for Friday, when DRAFT 2 is due. Have Draft 2 be as close to perfect as possible, so people can help with editing and proofreading, as well as organization.

2. Finish Ex. 23.9 on page 272 of The Everyday Writer.

3. If you want MY feedback, send me an email (kloden@southeast.edu) with your draft attached.

4. TWFTD: novice