Observing Draft #1

We check Ex. 22.10 on pages 22-23.

1. their
2. weather
3. great
4. seen
5. led
6. It's
7. too
8. your
9. buy
10. its
11. sight
12. seems
13. die
14. there

You will read and comment on each other's drafts. You earn points towards your own paper's grade by how thoroughly you answer the questions on the comment sheet. Keep the comments sheets with your draft and do not lose them!  They will all be handed in with the drafts and the final version.

Homework:

1. Continue to observe and write.  Draft #2 is due Tuesday. 

2.  Read "Observing Wolves" by Farley Mowat. Write the answers to the questions at the end in your daybook. As you read, underline any words you are not sure about, and copy three of them into your daybook, with definitions.

Improving a Thesis Statement

Editing. Ex. 22.10 on pages 22-23 in the Everyday Writer EXERCISE book.  Write down numbers 1-14 and write the correct word next to each number (for the words in parentheses).

You read pages 404-407 in Bedford about thesis statements.  Groups: Do the "Learning by Doing" exercise on page 407 in Bedford.  Groups: Is the thesis responding to the prompt in the A.A. intros?  In your daybook you write a better thesis for each one in the exercise.  Put "okay" next to any that are okay.

Improve your thesis for the A.A. essay so that it  truly answers the prompt.

We go to the lab.  There you make changes to your A.A. essay and re-submit it.  To do this, look at your introduction, your thesis , and the points you make in each paragraph.  Do you have interesting and detailed examples to support your points?

After you hand in a revised essay, you may begin working on your draft for tomorrow.

Homework:

1.  Draft #1 of your Observation/Description Essay is due.  Do NOT worry about the introduction on this draft.  Just begin describing what you saw and thought. Consider how to organize the infomation, and decide which details to include and which to leave out.

Your Introductions

Everyone list on the board what you are observing.
Handout on introductions.

Groups:  Each group comes up with three beginnings that match three from the handout.  Thesis: Audience awareness is key because it helps you decide what to wrote and how to write it.
Share.  Now, groups rank the introductions on another handout.  If you can, label which strategy is being used. Also, underline the thesis statements.

If there is time, Ex. 22.10.

Homework:

1.  Continue to observe and take notes.

Introductions

Listen to an essay that features observation: "In the Laboratory with Agassiz"  .  What college students were wearing then. The fish. Scudder later in life.



Answer in your daybook as I read: 
  
ichthyology-
entomology-
interdicted-
How long did he have to look at the fish?

What was "the best entomological lesson [he] ever had"?

Cover sheet for short essay. Fill out and attach to your essay.



We look at writing introductions, pages 428-430 in Bedford and pages 80-81 in Everyday Writer.



Homework:

1.  Continue to observe and take notes for the first paper.  Remember, you must fill 2 pages by Friday, when I will check your daybooks.

Observation

"For Godsake, keep your eyes open. Notice what's going on around you."  William Burroughs

Here is an interesting place.  In your daybook, describe what you see.

We look at page 78 in Bedford.

Then we read "Communications" p. 82-84.  Discuss.

Read page 85 and assignment handout. List in your daybook 5 places you could observe over the next three days.

Homework:

1.  Begin observing a scene.  You must fill two pages of your daybook with notes about the scene between now and Thursday.  On Thursday night you will write a rough draft to bring to class Friday.