Problem/Solution Due + New Short Essay

You hand in your Problem/Solution papers.

I return your last short essays, on Close Observation.  You read your essay and consider how well you developed your ideas.  Which description fits your paper:

A- Development is thorough, vivid and thoughtful. Goes beyond the obvious.

B- Support by details and/or examples is adequate.

C- Development of ideas is consistently thin or lacking. 

F - Support of ideas is not present.

In your daybook decide which grade your essay earned. Then you'll find out.


We watch this video.

In your daybook:  How does Grey think copyright law should be changed? Do you agree with him?

I hand out the prompt for the new short essay.  We discuss.

Right now jot down a rough outline of your thoughts on intellectual property.  You'll write on this Tuesday.

To help you write this essay, you might watch this film as well.

Homework:
Have a good weekend.  When we return there will be a daybook check, and you'll write this short essay in class on Tuesday.

Reading Draft #2 Problem/Solution

Remember the semicolon?  Which of these is correct?

1. She was thinking about buying him a gift; when she saw the doodad in the store window.

2.  After arriving late for their date, she was apologetic; he was not happy.

3.  As soon as she offered him the gift; his expression changed.

After you read drafts, you will do Exercise 39.2 on pages 101-102 in the exercise book. Next to each number write either C for correct, or R for remove, or Comma for replacing the semicolon with a comma.

Then you each read and comment on two drafts.

Homework:

Proofread your paper and be ready to hand it in tomorrow.

TWFTD: none

Revising Again

I return your Summary/Response papers.  In your daybook, answer these questions:

1.  What was the greatest strength of this paper? (you figure one out)

2.  What was one weakness?

3.  Where did you lose the most points?

4.  Look at your grade sheet on your Long Observation paper (blue).  Record here your grade on the Long Observation paper and this paper.  What is the difference?  Why did your score improve (or not)?

Now we're going to use a forum in Moodle.  You will go to our class in Moodle, open the forum that's under your Problem/Solution paper upload, and post your thesis statement from this paper there. {You use a button labeled "Add a new discussion topic." Your subject should be the title of your paper; then paste your thesis into the text box.}

When you have done that, you may work on your draft.  Upload it as Part 2 WITH the highlighting, but remove the highlighting to print it for class Wednesday. The Final Version is due Thursday.

Homework:

1.  Finish revising Draft 2 for tomorrow.  It will need to be uploaded in Moodle as Part 2 with highlights. Remove highlights for readers tomorrow.

2.  TWFTD:  theft in the OED.

Revising

First of all, thinkwrite about this: Copying is Not Theft.


Then bring your Problem/Solution draft onscreen.  Upload it in Moodle to the TurnItIn assignment, but be sure to choose Part 1.

After that, you are going to work on these parts of your essay:

A thesis:  one sentence that contains both the problem and the solution.  This may be in your introduction, or it may be in the middle where you transition from problem to solution.  When it is written, highlight it in RED.

Statements to convince us of the importance of your problem.  Highlight these with green.  Label them as Pathos, Logos or Ethos in [brackets].         

Go back to the beginning and work on your hook.  Highlight it with yellow.    

A statement that motivates us to help with the solution. Hightlight this with blue.

At the end of class, save this file and continue to revise for tomorrow.

Homework:

1.  Draft #2 will be worked on tomorrow as well.

2.  TWFTD:  You choose a word you've heard lately.  Look it up in the OED.