Type the Short Observation Essay

Turn in your daybook.

Type up the Short Observation Essay.

See you Monday.

Observation Paper Due/ Short Essay Prompt

Organize your Observation paper with all drafts and blue comment sheets.

In your daybook answer these questions:

1.  What was the easiest part of the process for writing this paper?


2.  What step was the most difficult and why?


3.  Is there anything you would do differently, as you look back?

Now your short Audiences Awareness essays.  Score your own using the handout. Record this score in your daybook.  Then see what I gave you.

New prompt for tomorrow:  The Utility of Short Observation.

Homework:

1.  Brainstorm on the Short Observation prompt, filling one page in your daybook.

2. Tomorrow you will type it up during class. 

3.  Hand in daybooks tomorrow also.

4. TWFTD:  elusive in the OED.

Metaphors

I. In your daybook, make two columns labelled Latinate vs. Anglo-Saxon words.  Categorize these words:  superfluous, nomenclature, subsequent, follow, name, enough.

We watch this video. So, think about your words. Just because it comes from the Latin, does NOT make it better!

II. Another thing to think about in your Observation paper is using a comparison to help us imagine something.  These are similes and metaphors.  For instance, look at the handout.  Copy down your two favorites into your daybook, please.

Now we go to the lab, where you open your draft in Moodle and see about corrections/changes. Also, finish comment sheets from yesterday, as needed.Do you know about search and highlighting?  Check all your their/there/their, for starters.  Avoid "There is"  or "There are".  Is dialogue punctuated correctly?

Homework:


1.  Bring to class your printed final version, MLA style (see yellow handout), and all drafts and comment sheets.

2.  TWFTD:  sinister in the OED -- be sure to scroll down through all meanings.

Draft #2 Observation/Description

Review of coordination and subordination: Combine the following sentences (clauses) two ways using sub or coord.

Education is an elusive word. It often means different things to different people. [p.316-317 EW]

How are you beginning this paper? A hook?  Something to grab us?  NOT "I chose X for my observation paper." 

I show you how to upload your draft to TurnItIn through Moodle.  We go to the lab, where you do that, and you read two drafts by your classmates.

Homework:

1.  Read comments and make revisions.  Tomorrow during class there will be some time for editing using the TurnItIn software, and my input. The Final Version is due Thursday. What will you do to improve it?  You earn points for making changes.

2.  TWFTD:  thing in the OED.

Sentence Variety

I return the Lego directions. Did you read Mowat?

1. The temperature was dropping so I picked all my peppers last night.

2. If it froze last night my tomatoes are probably finished.

3. I wanted bushels of tomatoes when I planted four different varieties.

We look at sentences and Section 24 in Everyday Writer. I explain subordination and coordination.

You could watch these two explain it all....

And then you can listen to this.


Homework:

1.  Draft #2 due, typed. Look at your sentences.  Is there variety in length and structure?  Run spell check.  Be sure all your details help to make your point.  You should be certain what your point is! Make sure your draft will be accessible in the computer lab on a computer.


2.  TWFTD: euphemism.