Observation Draft #1

Today you practice more analytical thinking.

#1 Read and React: use ! and ?

#2 Analyze: Are the details clear? Do I understand and "see" the scene?

#3 Evaluate: What works well?   give !!! What could be improved?  give ???

AND do this in a supportive fashion. I'm awarding you points on the quality of your input.

You may write positive remarks and questions on the draft; NO CORRECTIONS.

You will fill out the blue "Writer's Sheet" (handout). I'll pass around 2 "Reader's Sheets" that will be filled out about your draft. When we're done, all these sheets will go home with you, and you will revise your draft into Draft #2.

Homework:

1. Make changes/additions to your draft. Draft #2 typed is due Tuesday. How will you save it? On Tuesday Draft 2 must be available electronically in order to upload it to TurnItIn in Moodle. BACK UP A FLASH DRIVE!

2.  Remember on Wednesday your two letters are due (Short Project #2).  They are to be MLA format, font size 12, Times New Roman.  If that is not correct, I'll hand them back to you.

3.  Before class Monday watch this 10 minute video on the language. There will be questions on Monday.

4. TWFTD:  analyze

5.  For the electro-mechanical crowd.

Sentence Variety

Grammar 

About conjunctions.

About coordination and subordination.


Now do Ex. 24.1 on page 27 in the little white book. Recopy the entire paragraph into your daybook, giving it sentence variety using any style of combining you prefer (coordination OR subordination).

For the remainder of class you can be working on Short Project #2 or Draft #1 of Observation.

Draft #1 is due tomorrow.  It can be hand written OR typed.  It should be organized into paragraphs some;  it should be trying to meet both parts of the assignment -- showing the scene and making a point.

Homework:

1.  Draft 1 of Long Observation due tomorrow.  Typed or written.  Paragraphs.  Have it ready before class starts.

2.  TWFTD:  your choice from a textbook or reading for this class or any other class.

Letters and Links

Who's reading your stuff?  Thinkwrite.

You are going to write two letters (email format).  This is to demonstrate how your writing (content and style) can change depending on the rhetorical situation (audience, purpose, genre).

Here's the assignment:

Audience Awareness

A key to effective writing is tailoring your writing to your audience. Using the Lego project, you found out how well you were able to communicate concrete directions to your classmates.

Now you are going to write two letters (think long emails) to two different recipients.  What you write and how you write it will change, depending upon your chosen audience.

Types/Purpose of Letter:

I.  Advice to:

• A friend, a family   member
• Yourself as a younger person
•  Unknown person beginning a situation you have experience with     

II.   Fan Letter to:

•  Your favorite musician/athlete/star  
•  A person in your life you admire
• An organization or entity

III.  Complaint to:

• A person in your life, past or present
•  A company, a journalist
• An   entity

IV.  Thank you?  Other?

Step 1:  Choose the type of letter you will write, either I, II or III.  You then have to decide on TWO different recipients, and you will write TWO letters of the same type, but to different recipients.
 

Step 2:  Below your standard MLA heading (your name,  my name, etc.), type

Genre:

Purpose:

          Audience:

          Subject Line:                    Fill these in for each letter (email) that you write

Step 3:  After you have drafted your letters, give careful thought to what you will put in the subject line.  This is where you get the person to open that email and read what you have written.  It also can’t appear to be spam.

Step 4: Format these letters as you would a real email --  short paragraphs, correct grammar and spelling, content appropriate to the audience.

Step 5:  Print when ready and hand in.  No drafts are required (but you should…).

Final and only version due Wednesday Jan. 30.

EXAMPLE PAPER:

Joe Schmoe

Mrs. Loden

English 1010

30 Jan 2013

            Genre:  Advice

            Audience: Any college freshman

            Purpose:  To prevent my dumb mistakes

            Subject Line: Kid, before you start college, read this.

                           The letter starts……

=======================================================

            Genre: Advice

            Audience:  My brother

            Purpose:  To help him decide on a career

            Subject Line:  It’s only a job—sort of.

                       The letter starts…..

 

Read letters at the links.  Think.  Tomorrow is a work day;  use it for either letters or Draft #1 of Long Observation.

1.  Be working on Draft #1.

2.  Be thinking about letters.

3.  TWFTD:  idiosyncrasies.

 

Writing for the Audience

How can I "give you pain"? Did the Legos?

For today and tomorrow I'm wanting you to think about Short Project #2;  you must be also thinking about your Long Observation, which has the first draft due on Friday.  There's no more to say about it in class, until you bring the draft on Friday.

I.  Grammar: Read this page. Do this page's exercises. Number 1-7 in your daybook and record how many tries it takes to get each one correct.

II. Now, read Bedford pages 609-612, "Lazy Eyes" by Michael Agger. See it online here. Have both the book and computer versions to read -- decide which is easier for you.  Also, you will answer the questions below in your daybook:

1. Which one of the blue links in the article would you click on if you were reading this online? (You must list at least one and tell why.)

2. What is btw (in paragraph 5)?

3. To go with the heading "It's a Jungle Out There" Agger explains Nielsen's hunting metaphor.

• What are readers ("humans") called?
• What are we looking for in an online article?
• What is information equivalent to?

4. List at least 3 ways Agger shows (illustrates/demonstrates) what he's writing about.

5. Finish the sentence below in a way that sums up the point of this article. Copy it ALL down:

• In his article "Lazy Eyes," Michael Agger ....

Homework:

1.  Tomorrow I'll give you the assignment sheet for the Short Project #2.  But for you to think about, here's the general assignment.  You will write two different letters.  They will be the same genre, but addressed to different people.  My suggestions of genres are advice, fan, and complaint. You can propose your own, as well.  Tomorrow we'll look at examples.

2.  Finish any of the the above work.

3.  TWFTD: ludic