Final Version Observation Due

We judge ourselves by what we feel capable of doing, while others judge us by what we have already done.

                          Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

You have one more shot to proofread your papers.  Then you turn everything in.

Then groups discuss questions 4,5 and 6 on page 104 in Bedford.  One person writes your answers down to hand in.

Now as a group brainstorm twenty questions that might be useful in an interview.  Everyone lists these in their daybooks.

In your daybook list the name and phone number of the person you will interview within the next 5 days.  Call them today!

Homework:

1.  Develop a list of 8-10 questions you will use with your subject.  Write these in your daybook. 

2. Schedule the interview.  Do it. 

3. Take notes IN YOUR DAYBOOK about the interview, even if you record it electronically. 

Interviewing

Fragments.  Sec. 37  

Intro.


We look at interviewing and read an example paper. Read the example on pages 102-104 in Bedford.  Answer questions 1 and 2 on page 104 in your daybook.

Then we look at Sec. 37 in Everyday Writer and you do some of Ex. 37.1 in your daybook.

Homework:

1.  Your Final Version of the Observation  is due tomorrow.  Bring ALL drafts and all blue sheets that go with them.

2.  Tomorrow you must be able to give me the name and phone number of the person you plan to interview for the next paper. Make a decision and find out TODAY what the phone number is.

Revising

Editing: 

1. A goldfinch darted over the sunflowers, its mate followed closely.

2. Flying through the tall grass and disappearing out of sight behind the corn.

3. The corn rustled and then was quiet I wondered what had just invisibly passed so close to me.

Revising:  We look at Bedford pages 467-476.  Make a list of three weaknesses you will be looking for/working on.  Things to highlight:  all commas, "There is, there are,"  "it is."  Do you use "and" a lot? Are apostrophes on your list of weaknesses?  Very? Highlight all of them and come up with alternatives.

Homework:

1. Continue to revise this paper.

Draft #2

Drafts

When you are done, read in Bedford pages 89-91. 

Coordination and Subordination

1. His attitude of fatigue vanished and was replaced by a look of bewilderment.


2. It was true that I wanted to be inconspicuous but I felt uncomfortable at being so totally ignored.


3. Although once as numerous as the plains buffalo caribou had shown a catastrophic decrease.


4. They were so interested that they swam in for a closer view of this apparition on the shore.

See Section 24 in Everyday Writer. Do Exercise 24.1 page 27 in the Everyday Writer Exercise book.

We discuss revising your drafts.

Homework:

1.  Create and print Draft #2 of your observation essay.  Run spell check and grammar check on this draft. Look at the grading grid on the back of the blue writer's page for ideas about improvement.