Final Version Due

Hand in your final Long Essay.

What about "Amerika"?  Thinkwrite, please, if you did not on Monday, what you think the point of this music video is.

Then what I think.

Then.  Remember watching TED?  We watch this.  

What is Mike Rowe's point?  What does he want to do?

Homework:

1.  Copy two quotes by Mike Rowe from this video into your daybook.  Use the "interactive transcript" feature beside the video to do this.

2.  TWFTD:  Machiavellian

3.  Here are the two prompts to think about for Monday.  You will write on one:

A.  "Getting it wrong" happens to everyone.  In fact, there are benefits to making mistakes.  What are those benefits?  Or what is necessary in order to experience the benefits of a mistake? 

B.  There seem to be few young people interested in the kinds of dirty jobs Mike Rowe listed.  He says there are "forgotten benefits" to hard work.  Do you agree?  Can you describe them?  Or if you disagree, explain why.

Editing

We watch a video.

We check the answers for Ex. 33.6.

Edit your papers.  Use TurnItIn and ask me about issues. I will subtract 2 points for any misspelled there/their/they're. Italicize and capitalize names of magazines.  Watch pronouns.

Homework:

1. Final Version with all papers and ads due.

Draft #2

In your daybook, describe how writing the essay yesterday went for you.  Do you like writing something quickly and forgetting it, or is it difficult having little time to prepare?

In your experience/expectations, is "real world" writing more or less like yesterday's exercise?

You read drafts.  Read the draft BEFORE you look at the ads.

 Upload your draft to TurnItIn.com.

Homework:

1. Finish your draft so that you can edit it during class tomorrow.

2.  Final version due Friday.

Timed Essay

Today is the timed shared in-class essay.  Please choose a prompt, do what it wants, and provide lots of unique, interesting detail!

Homework:

1. Draft #2 of the Rhetorical Analysis is due.  Bring your ads, and have an electronic version of the draft as well. 

2.  Upload your draft to TurnItIn.com before class on Thursday.

Moving Images

First of all, what about the pronouns you choose?  Look at the reading from Friday, "What's the Point?"

Everyday Writer Section 33.  We look carefully at page 304-306. You do Ex. 33.6 on page 77-78 in the exercise book.  Then look at 33.8.  Where is the indirect use of "you" and how would you rewrite that?

Then it's more visual rhetoric -- moving pictures.

So get out your daybooks to think about WHAT'S THE POINT of this video.

In order to get there, write down these questions:

1.  How is color used in this video?
2.  What shots can you notice that allude to other images or ideas?
3.  How are close-ups of faces used?

AMERIKA - AMERICA

Refrain:We're all living in America,
America is wunderbar.
We're all living in America,
Amerika, Amerika.

When I'm dancing,
I want to lead,
even if you all are spinning alone,
let's exercise a little control.

I'll show you how it's done right.
We form a nice round (circle),
freedom is playing on all the fiddles,
music is coming out of the White House,
and near Paris stands Mickey Mouse.

We're all living in America...

I know steps that are very useful,
and I'll protect you from missteps,
and anyone who doesn't want to dance in the end,
just doesn't know that he has to dance!

We form a nice round (circle),
I'll show you the right direction,
to Africa goes Santa Claus,
and near Paris stands Mickey Mouse.

We're all living in America,
America is wunderbar.
We're all living in America,
Amerika, Amerika.

We're all living in America,
Coca-Cola, Wonderbra,
We're all living in America,
Amerika, Amerika.

This is not a love song,
this is not a love song.
I don't sing my mother tongue,
No, this is not a love song.

We're all living in America,
Amerika is wunderbar.
We're all living in America,
Amerika, Amerika.

We're all living in America,
Coca-Cola, sometimes WAR,
We're all living in America,
Amerika, Amerika. (from about.com)



Here is a link to another student's interpretation of the song.


And if you have time for some more rhetorical analysis of videos, watch this.
Homework:



1. Buy a bluebook for tomorrow.  You know how to write a 5 paragraph essay.  Be sure that you FOCUS  ON DOING WHATEVER THE PROMPT ASKS FOR.

2. Draft #2 is due Wednesday.