Return of the Papers

Commas -- style or rules?

I hand you your papers.

In your journal, list one comment on your paper that surprised you and one thing (or more) that you already knew.

Also make an error list. List the number of the error and then use the Everyday Writer ( Top Twenty) and write an explanation of what you did.

I hand out another example of writing about memories; read that one, and, if you wish, look at this example of a writer near the end of his career. That's E.B.White's "Death of a Pig."

Homework:

1. Prepare the final version of your memory essay. Bring all drafts and comment sheets to class Monday.

Draft #2

You read each other's drafts.

Rather than lengthy essays, I'd like pieces that are well-structured; try to give each other feedback about clearly building the whole paper around the dominant idea.

Tomorrow I'll return your observation papers.

Homework:

1. Think about your feedback and what you want to accomplish in this paper. Work on it, but leave yourself time for a thorough edit before the final version is due on Monday.

2. One vocabulary word.

More Remembering

Freewrite: Think about your childhood and presents.

Was there once ONE thing you just had to have?

Was there something that others might not approve of (for gender or other reasons)?

Was there one thing you never got, or one item you received but always wondered why ?

Or why you ever wanted it in the first place?



Then read the Rodriguez piece.

Annotate your copy of his essay for his use of sensory detail/specific scenes/contrasts/conflicts/point of view. At the bottom explain what the point of this piece is.

Do Ex. 26.2 (page 269) in your journal.


Homework:

1. Prepare your second draft for class tomorrow. Make sure that your scenes are building your main idea, not distracting from it.

2. One vocabulary word.

Draft #1 Remembering

Consider with me again these words:

"Even to see it drifting out of orbit in boredom, or rolling up out of fatigue, not to mention floating back at attention in excitement (bearing witness, a friend has called it), deeply suitable to my personlaity, and even characteristic of me."

You read each other's drafts.

Homework:

1. Take your draft home and improve it. Draft #2 is due Thursday.

2. One vocabulary word.

Remembering

Freewrite: Please write awhile on Alice Walker's "Beauty." Discuss her use of scenes and detail, and then spend some time on what her point is. How many different ways does she try to get across her point?

Then as groups answer the questions on the handout.

In the Everyday Writer we look at parallelism, pages 266-269, Section 26. Please write out Ex. 26.1 in your journal.

Homework:

1. Draft #1 due tomorrow.

2. One vocabulary word.