Revising

Editing: 

1. A goldfinch darted over the sunflowers, its mate followed closely.

2. Flying through the tall grass and disappearing out of sight behind the corn.

3. The corn rustled and then was quiet I wondered what had just invisibly passed so close to me.

Revising:  We look at Bedford pages 467-476.  Make a list of three weaknesses you will be looking for/working on.  Things to highlight:  all commas, "There is, there are,"  "it is."  Do you use "and" a lot? Are apostrophes on your list of weaknesses?  Very? Highlight all of them and come up with alternatives.

Homework:

1. Continue to revise this paper.