Observation Due/ Reading

Turn in your Observation paper with all drafts and blue comment sheets.

In your daybook answer these questions:

1.  What was the easiest part of the process for writing this paper?

2.  What step was the most difficult and why?

3.  Is there anything you would do differently, as you look back?

A book can change a life.


We meet William Kamkwamba.


Now, William later.



 His website.



Daybook work:  We go to the library, where you look at the books on the shelves upstairs.  You must find at least three titles that interest  you.  In your daybook, list the title, author, and what you would expect to find out if you were to read the book. If you have time, begin to read.

Homework:


1.  Read something.  Anything.  For a while.


2. TWFTD:  decimate

Revise, Edit and Proofread

I. First of all,  put these two clauses together FOUR different ways:

I spent two hours last night working on my paper.  This morning I could find no changes in the file.

II. Now, put your paper on the screen, side-by-side with this list.

1. Highlight all There/Here/It  and see if you can rewrite.

2. Highlight the words you easily confuse:  there/their, its/it's, etc.  Fix.

3. Highlight all commas.  Read the whole sentence. Is it correct and clear?

4. Look for coordination that is missing the comma (,and/ ,for/ ,but)

5. Highlight any  ;  (semicolons). Could a period take its place?  Then it is correct.

6. Underline the first sentence of a paragraph.  Is everything in that paragraph somehow related to that sentence?  Check some more.

7. Are any of your paragraphs longer than half a page?  See whether you can separate some ideas.

8. Is there variety in how you begin your sentences?

9. What errors were marked on your Audience Awareness essay?  How can you prevent those here?

10. Double check the format!!!  Font 12, no extra space betweeen paragraphs, last name and page # at top in a header.

ASK ME.  When it all looks perfect, pair up and start reading it out loud to your partner, starting with the last paragraph.  Take turns, paragraph by paragraph.

Homework:

1.  Final Version Observation due tomorrow.  Typed, MLA style. Put your word count next to my name in the heading.

2. Bring the blue comment sheets and writer's page to turn in also.

3.  TWFTD:  euphemism

Words, Analogies, Audiences and Wolves

I. In your daybook, make two columns labelled Latinate vs. Anglo-Saxon words.  Categorize these words:  superfluous, nomenclature, subsequent, follow, name, enough.

We watch this video. So, think about your words. Just because it comes from the Latin, does NOT make it better!

II. Another thing to think about in your Observation paper is using a comparison to help us imagine something.  These are similes and metaphors.  For instance, look at the handout.  Copy down your two favorites into your daybook, please.

III. I return your audience awareness short essays.  In your daybook, after you read my comments and marks, copy down one strength and one weakness of this paper. If you wish to improve your grade on this paper, make the suggested changes and hand it back in.

IV. Finally, read a professional writer's observations in " Observing Wolves" by Farley Mowat.  Read this and answer the questions in your daybook.

Homework:

1.  Read Mowat and answer the questions in your daybook.

2.  Work on your Observation paper.  Final Version due Tuesday, typed MLA style.

3.  Have an electronic version of it available to put on the computer Monday.

4.  TWFTD: nice